End Note: I think the way that you talk throughout the essay about the use of metaphors in the medical field. I do think that the way the essay is organized could be changed so that its not expository and more communicative, like a communication with your opinions. Changing of the format would help with this. I wouldn’t make each paragraph a different article, I would try to integrate the readings together to make the point that they can support your thesis. I also noticed that the citations on your quotes need to be fixed. I also like the use of your opinions and the integration of the facts from the readings. I think your essay is really well written and you have very strong points.
Your comments are varied and thoughtful. You offer specific suggestions that will help your peer improve their paper. All I can say is keep it up! Your peers are lucky to have you reading their work! 🙂